the following is a student draft. it may contain errors. first job (1) i had heard about this - the…

the following is a student draft. it may contain errors. first job (1) i had heard about this - the frustrating buildup of exhaust and screeches and blaring horns, the people lined up in restrictive, never - ending lines as if waiting to enter an amusement park full of exhilarating rides and overpriced souvenirs. (2) but we were not waiting on anything of the sort, or even remotely of the sort. (3) we were simply waiting to go home from our jobs in this stop - and - go traffic. (4) i had recently applied for my first job, and this was the thanks i had received. (5) when i arrived home, mom asked about my day, but the smile that accompanied her questioning was neither of delight nor of curiosity; it was a smile that was patient and cruel to me. (6) but i did not unload my frustrations with self - satisfaction. (7) but i had no wonder, in reward, with a matching smile that more day smile turned to a look of astonishment, surprisingly educational. (8) moms (9) i walked upstairs to my room with a steady pace, not looking back. (10) i lay on my bed, that i had obviously outgrown, and relished in the pride that my determination and optimistic attitude had given me. select the correct answer. what is the best way to revise sentence 3 to include better sensory details? a. we were simply waiting to go home from our jobs so that we could get up tomorrow and do it again. b. we were simply waiting to go home from our jobs in our cars as we looked out the window at the city. c. we were simply waiting to go home from our jobs as accountants, lawyers, secretaries, and doctors. d. we were simply waiting to go home from our jobs in this nightmarish loop of continual stop - and - go torture.

the following is a student draft. it may contain errors. first job (1) i had heard about this - the frustrating buildup of exhaust and screeches and blaring horns, the people lined up in restrictive, never - ending lines as if waiting to enter an amusement park full of exhilarating rides and overpriced souvenirs. (2) but we were not waiting on anything of the sort, or even remotely of the sort. (3) we were simply waiting to go home from our jobs in this stop - and - go traffic. (4) i had recently applied for my first job, and this was the thanks i had received. (5) when i arrived home, mom asked about my day, but the smile that accompanied her questioning was neither of delight nor of curiosity; it was a smile that was patient and cruel to me. (6) but i did not unload my frustrations with self - satisfaction. (7) but i had no wonder, in reward, with a matching smile that more day smile turned to a look of astonishment, surprisingly educational. (8) moms (9) i walked upstairs to my room with a steady pace, not looking back. (10) i lay on my bed, that i had obviously outgrown, and relished in the pride that my determination and optimistic attitude had given me. select the correct answer. what is the best way to revise sentence 3 to include better sensory details? a. we were simply waiting to go home from our jobs so that we could get up tomorrow and do it again. b. we were simply waiting to go home from our jobs in our cars as we looked out the window at the city. c. we were simply waiting to go home from our jobs as accountants, lawyers, secretaries, and doctors. d. we were simply waiting to go home from our jobs in this nightmarish loop of continual stop - and - go torture.

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Brief Explanations:

Sensory details involve descriptions that appeal to the five senses - sight, sound, smell, taste, touch. Option D uses the phrase "nightmarish loop of continual stop - and - go torture" which creates a vivid and sensory - rich description of the traffic situation. It gives a sense of the unpleasant experience through the use of the word "nightmarish" and the description of the stop - and - go motion.

Answer:

D. We were simply waiting to go home from our jobs in this nightmarish loop of continual stop - and - go torture.